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Pancake Stories
Topic Started: Dec 20 2005, 11:22 PM (173 Views)
Super Pancake
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This is something I had put up on U.M.

"The Heist"
Based loosely on a True Story.

(12:34 a.m. Monday November 21st) Joe, The Kid and I are at our target. "Is it worth it, man?", said Joe.

"I don't know, but we got a job to do. It's crazy but I'm desperate and I need the cash.", I said. By the way, Joe isn't my partner's name. This is the first time we have ever met. All I know is his name is Mr. Orange, and The Kid is with me and I'm Mr. Green. Ha a la City on fire my favorite movie the boss has impeccable taste.

(2:45 a.m. Thursday November 10th) At a club I see our boss about the heist. "I want you at the target around 12, 1 ish o'clock. A man named Mr. Orange will be there, you'll know who to look for.", said the boss.

"How would he know who I am.", I said.

"Don't be a smart ass, let me finish.", he waives his finger at me. "He knows you as Mr. Green."

"Yeah whatever, I guess I'll be dressed in a Shrek costume?" I get up from the table and go on my way.

"Mr. Orange did you have to wear an orange jumper? You look stupid.", I said to Joe.

"**** off I'm going to the back and change my clothes into something black.", Joe gets up from the front seat and heads to the back of the van. "Why did you bring this kid along?"

"I ain't a kid, I'm 21 you b****!", said The Kid. Joe stops short putting his pants on and goes after the kid. I put my hands out and stop Joe.

"Hey cut it out you two, you watch your mouth, kid. And Joe don't lay a finger on him or I'll kill you." There's only silence and scared stares. "All right."

Both of them reply, "Yeah."

"Any way, The Kid is just the getaway driver.", I said. Joe finished so we drove up in front of the target. "Ready?", I ask. Joe nods and says, "Ready." The Kid nods. "O.k. lets go."

Joe and I put our ski masks on, with our gun ready. We jump out of the van and storm the GameStop. We walk toward the guy at the counter. I yell at him, "Give us the X-box 360; we want two of them now!" He freezes. "******* move it!", I said. I jump over the counter grab him and take him to the back. I guess his manager was there. He looked at me funny, like he was about to do something. I fire a slug into his head, and he falls to the ground. The other guy just crapped in his pants and half faints. 3 shots are fired. "Yo, whats going on out there?"

"Some guy tried to be a hero.", said Joe.

"Where are the 360's?" I ask the Sh!t Pants on the floor.

"They're over there", he said.

"Go get me 2 of them now." He goes and picks up 2 boxes and hands them to me. I grab them and head out the back, only to realize they're core packs.

"These are the retard packs, I want the premiums." I drop the boxes on the floor and shoot Sh!t Pants in the knee cap and he screams "Where are the premiums mother ******?!", I shouted. He points to the back. I run over there, get them and head out to the front. The Kid runs in the store.

"What are you doing in here? We're ready to go.", said Joe.

"Cops.", said The Kid.

"What? Somebody in here is a snitch.", said The Kid. The Sh!t Pants gets up with a magnum and points it at me. Joe runs over and takes the slug. The Kid pulls out his piece and blasts Sh!t Pants away.

"****, he's the snitch!", said The Kid.

"Who?", I said.

"Mr. Brown."

"Shut up.", said Joe.

"You are the snitch.", said The Kid.

"He just took a ******* bullet for me, man.", I said. "No way he's the rat."

The Kid aims at Joe, and I quickly pull the trigger and kill my partner of 3 years. ****** up I know 3 years we did jobs together, but he was wrong on this one. Joe ain't no rat, no rat takes a bullet for nobody.

"The store is surrounded. Give it up punks.", We hear from outside.

"Damn, the cops got us Joe.", I said. I look at Joe. He took the bullet in the chest and he's loosing a lot of blood. He's as good as dead. I look around and there is a guy on the floor and a couple of teens huddled in the corner of the store.

"Hey, whats your name?", said Joe.

"They call me SP.", I tell him.

"O.K. scumbags, were coming in." We hear from outside.

"Joe you ain't gonna make it. You might as well stay, but I can't go down. This is 3 strikes for me. I killed a guy, give me your gun. If I go down, I'll take the rap for that one guy over there. I'm gonna make a run for it.", I told him.

Joe grabs my arm and with his last breath and says, "SP, I'm a cop." He slumps over.

"****!!", I yell. I look over to The Kid, and push Joe off me. I get up, reload my gun and pick up a 360. Its all or nothing now.

To be continued.................................
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I fixed the bajillion gramatical errors. Super Pancake, there, their, and they're are completely different words. A good story otherwise. It would help if you fleshed it out with more description.
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Thanks.
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