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| Legend of Zelda A New Hero; My First Fic, Hope it's good, reply plz | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Feb 27 2006, 01:05 PM (620 Views) | |
| Uzumaki Naruto | Feb 27 2006, 01:05 PM Post #1 |
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Heres, The start Prolouge Long Ago there was a land know as Hyrule. It was peaceful land where everyone lived there everyday lives until A great evil appered, This evil was so strong it dystroyed Hyrule in 3 days. The Hero of Time was killed during this battle by the evil but he was able to Seal it away forever...... Meny years past since The great war of Hyrule. Everyone forgot it happened and contuined with there everyday live's, One day a young boy and his friend was going to embark on the greatest adventure since the Hero of Time........ |
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| Uzumaki Naruto | Feb 27 2006, 01:06 PM Post #2 |
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Chapter 1 The New Hero " Where Am I?" A voice called out as his he fixed his eye's on the ceiling " Cody?" He shouted, looking around then A tenancle Grabbed his foot " Woah!!" The boy shouted as a voice came from nowhere " You shall... complete... my..power..." it growled The boy tryed his best to get free but it never worked " Who are you?" The boy asked with no fear in his voice. The thing spoke softly " You..shall.....complete...my.... power...." It said again. The boy tried to get free but the thing's grip tightened " YOU.... SHALL.COMPLETE ...MY..POWER" It shouted as it broken the boy's leg and threw himt o the ground The boy was contuined to whine until somthing hit his head.... A pillow? The Boy quickly got up and Saw another boy by his door " Joey will you Shut up Already?" The boy Complained " Cody... What's going on?" Joey asked looking at his friend, Cody sighed " Remember? You won a trip to New York and you invited me!" Cody growled as he moved toward's his room again " I'll meet you downstairs" Cody Said as he walked towards the door. Joey nodded as he quickly hopped from his bed his blound hair reflected from the sun he had greenish blue eyes. Joey quickly got dressed and walked downstairs where he saw Cody his best friend. He has Brown hair and brown eye's. "Well about Time" Cody Shouted As he looked at his watch, Joey shrugged " What did you eat for Breakfast?" He asked " Nothing!! Thanks to you.." Cody hissed " Come on let's get somthing to eat....." He qucikly walked away heading for the door Joey began to follow when he felt a slight pain through his leg " ow...." Joey fliched as he contuined to walk to the door |
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| Uzumaki Naruto | Feb 27 2006, 01:28 PM Post #3 |
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Chapter 2 The Black Tower " So Where to now?" Joey asked walking dow the street, Cody looked at him " I'm searching now.." HE answered as he scanned the area. " Let's see...." Cody answered " We have a choice to go to the Empire state building or. The Black Tower...." Cody said looking up " Hmmm I'll Say the Black Tower." Joey said as he walked down the road toward's the tower When They arrived, The Tower was Huge it seemed higher then the clouds Joey grinned " So this is the famous Black Tower..." He said, Cody looked at him " Yes this was also in the Hero of Times Legends, You see There was once a queen who was in love with a salior. One day he vanished without a trace and she felt worried. So one day she began to build a large tower to look for her love, but A Powerful Evil from the past appered and Told the queen to Make the tower reach the heavens. So she listened and satrted to make the tower bigger Everyone wasin panic until The great Hero of Time came and he rescued Them from the evil.. The hero was never forgotten This is yet another one of the famous legends of the great hero." Cody answered Joey sighed " Man what do you do in Class anyway?" Joey asked, Cody grinned " I don't sleep thats for one thing" He laughed, Joey grinned as they walked towards the Tower. Once inside Joey looked around " Wow....." He said as he walked toward's the Stairs but Cody stopped him " Joey no ones ever been able to get up stairs.. so where using a evleator" Cody answered as Joey stepped in " What would I do without you?" Joey chuckled as the evleator went up " Fail Your exams" He answered grinning as the evleator reached the top floor the got out " Wow......" Cody said as he looked over the edge " Long drop if you fall" Joey chuckled as he gave Cody a tiny push, Cody fliched a bit but he laughed with Joey " well let's Go Down now.." Cody said as he walked away Joey grinned " Heh.. Poor Cody..." He turned around to look out a little farther when something whipped him in the arm " Arrrrgg" Joey grwoled in pain as he held on to his arm he turned around but nothing was there " Cody wait Up!!" He shouted running toward's the evleator with a large scar on his arm |
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| gamemasterdevil | Feb 28 2006, 09:46 PM Post #4 |
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Sorry, I'm a little confused. Is this LoZ in modern times? It's good, but I have no clue what time frame this is set in. |
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| Uzumaki Naruto | Mar 6 2006, 10:57 AM Post #5 |
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Errr... Yes this is The Aftermatch of it all, But Somthing will happen |
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| gamemasterdevil | Mar 6 2006, 07:48 PM Post #6 |
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Thanks for clearin' that up for me. |
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| Uzumaki Naruto | Mar 8 2006, 11:36 AM Post #7 |
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Chapter 3 Raiding the Tomb It was another bright sunny day In the big apple, Joey And his Friend Cody was walking around Looking for somthing to do, Joey shrugged at his friend " Man What can we do today?" He asked, The boy looked around wtaching the people walk by Cody shrugged " I don't know........." HE said when he banged into Two large kids " Hey watch where your going Dork" The First one said pushing Cody away Joey eyes met with the Bullies " Go away" HE said looking at them, The Two bullies laughed " What a turkey!!!They joked thinking he can beat us both up..." The secound guy then had a Idea " Hey Geranld...... If this Guy is so Tough he sould be able to go into the deapths of the Tomb, " Great Idea" HE said as he turned to Joey " If your so Brave.... I dare ya to go into the Hero of times Tomb and Bring all of his weapons to us, We will then say if your brave or not..." Joey Grinned " Alright... And when I come back I'll make sure you will never forget it...." Joey said smiling The bully laughed " Riiight meet us in thw back of the train station...." HE said before tthe two walked away Joey looked over at Cody his face was clam , he knew that Face, That Face ment soon he was going to flip out Cody then opened his mouth " WHAT THE HELL IS WRONG WITH YOU!!!" HE shouted as people looked at him with Amazment Joey shrugged " You can't let anyone walk all over ya..." HE said Cody contuined " THAT'S GRAVEROBBING YOU CAN GET ARRESTED FOR THAT" he shouted Joey put his hand over Codys Mouth mouth " SHut it.... People might know..... Anyways where going there...." HE said walking away Cody sighed " What have I gotten myself into?..." HE asked before following him ~ The Graveyard~ Joey walked into the Gates as he looked around " HEh not bad...... I bet thats the grave of the Hero...." HE said Pointing at a Large Grave with a Large Triforce Ingraved on it Cody looked at it " Yeah..... It says, Here lies Link............ I Think I heard that Once........" HE said Joey shrugged " Ah well...... Lets go.." HE said pushing the Grave out of the way as he jumped into a large hole Cody Staretd to Grumble as he followed Joey ~ Inside The Grave~ Joey landed looking around " Hmm...... Looks like a Maze....." He said as he walked foward Cody landed also " Yeah....... We should hurry i'll follow behined you" he said Joey nodded " Alright lets go!"HE said running through the open door, The room had litten torches around And two unlit torches by a Door with Steel Bar covering it, Joey looked around " What do we do.......?" HE asked looking at Cody Cody looked at the Sticks on the ground " Lets try to Light thoese torches with these sticks by Simply chatching them on Fire, He said picking up a stick and lighting it one fire, Cody walked over to the Unlit torch and lit them both making the Door open Joey Laughed " Great Job!!!" HE said slapping his back Cody coughed " Alright...... Lets go" He said as they walked into the next room The Next Room had two switches and a Sealed door Cody looked at the switches " Hmmm....... Probley if...... We both stand on the switches... Joey step on that Switch and I will step on that one...." HE said Joey nodded as they both steped on the switches and the door opened again, The Boys Steped into Another room with Two pots and Two switches Joey Nodded at Cody as they stepped on them, The door opened " Alright.... This is easy to the next room...." HE said when he got off the switch, the door closed Joey growled " WHAT THE HELL!!!" HE shouted with Anger " Clam down...... It seem this is a driffent trap then before...... I think we need to keep both switchs pressed while we walk in...." Joey eyed him " And how do we do that?" he asked Cody looked around "hmmm..... What if we put these pots down on the switches that might hold it down" Joey grinned " Great Idea Cody....." HE said as he and cody picked up two pots and put them on the switches, The door opened Joey grinned " Alright lets go!!" HE said walking in in next room... there was nothing... In the room" Joey looked around " Nothing... Not even a door..." He said looking around Cody shrugged " Umm..... Not sure...." Joey growed as he puty hsi hand on the wall, But he fell in " Ow...... HEy Cody I found a door!!" HE said sticking his hand out showing Cody where he was Cody Walked into the wall " Amazing......." HE said " What is this exaclty... Magic?" HE asked looking at the wall he walked through Joey Sighed " Come on...." Lets go" HE said pulling Cody into the next door The Next room was a long coridor with holes in the wall Joey looked " Heh wonder what this trap is...." HE said walking towards the walls..... HE walked in when a Arrow flew across his face, He steped back looking worried Cody sighed " Joey.... Your faster... There is probley a Device that turns it off over there....." HE said Joey nodded " Alright.... Here I go" HE started to Ru n as fast as he could as Arrows Flew form one side to another....." Cody watched as Joey made it safe to the otherside Joey looked at the Switch on the ground and pushed it, They heard a loud click as the arrows stopped Cody crossed grinning " Alright lest go!!" HE said walking into the next room The next room was full of weapons and It had a Tomb on a penstal....." Joey looked around " The weapon room......" HE said looking at everything Cody nodded " Yeah... Lets take everything...." Joey nodded , when a Knife flew by his shoulder, HE turned around to see A Person wrapped in White and had a eye on it's chest, The Person spoke " You have invaded the scaraced Place...... Prepare to Die..."The person took out knifes and looked at Joey and Cody End chapter |
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| gamemasterdevil | Mar 8 2006, 01:23 PM Post #8 |
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Pretty good. The spelling could use minor improvement, and, for me, these chapters are kinda short. Otherwise, the plot is good. I like how you ended the chapter. |
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| Uzumaki Naruto | Mar 8 2006, 06:16 PM Post #9 |
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Thanks!! |
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| Uzumaki Naruto | Mar 12 2006, 05:04 AM Post #10 |
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Chapter 4 The Rewinding of the Ages Joey stood looking at the man " I'd move if I was you..." he growled as he stepped up The Man Chuckled " What if I don't move?" he asked in a cold voice Joey laughed " Heh then I'll make ya move..." he said The man laughed " Oh yeah with what?" he asked Joey loooked around at the weapons none matched what he trained with, Joey was a Swordsman, he was also very dangerous one, If you give him stick he probley beat you with it, " Errr....." joey said backing up Cody looked watching his best friend " Is there anything I can do?" he asked as he looked over a a hidden switch.... " Hmmm..." Cody thought as he crawled over there he got on the switch pressing it down, making a llight apperce from the sky, and a Blade layed there, a Blade with a Blue handle, Joey spotted it and ran towards it The man closed his eyes " You can't draw that blade.. Only the Desendets of the hero can...." he said opening his eyes then they where filled with Shocked " WHATS THIS?" he asked seeing Joey standing there... With That Sword " Heh time for to move out of our way...." he growled as he put the sword infront of him, watching the man Joey Jumped into the air heading towards the man with speed then time slowed before them as joeys sword went behined his back then as he went down with full blast hitting the man with a full powerful hit downwards The man lost his balance has he hit the floor, Joey put the sword away as he walked over to Cody, Heh.. Lets go he said as he picked up a few weapons, One of them was a Blue Ocreina " heh sweet.." Joey said putting his Mouth to it as he played, The Song of Time, The place started to glow as a beam appered in the room, Cody looked up at it " woah......" he said in amazement as he walked towards it Joey turned to the man, he was gone, Then a knife hit the Orcenia breaking it into Meny Peices, The man appered " NO......" he shouted as the Beam started to get bigger, it Engulfed everything in the room encluding them, The beam entered Space as it created a Time Portel... The adventure has begun..... " Sorry But this chapter is ment to be short... New Chapter soon" |
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