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| Tweet Topic Started: Jan 29 2008, 04:52 PM (189 Views) | |
| Alex | Jan 29 2008, 04:52 PM Post #1 |
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This is the Prologue and Chapter 1 of a novel I hope to finish and have published by end of summer. http://www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/1381944 Please let me know what you guys think of it. |
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| Rogue | Jan 29 2008, 07:27 PM Post #2 |
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Hmm.... Well, I like it. But, being the harsh critic I've come to be, forgive me if my feedback seems a bit... harsh. [I don't have an account && I'm horrible with passwords, so I'll just comment here] First off, an excellent plot. It's a rather spicy twist to what really happened in WW2, and since I love history, I immediately took interest. I quite enjoyed it. However, how it was structured was like an amature Quizilla story. The quotes were not properly placed, a few puncuation errors, and some of the similies and metaphors seemed as if a 7th grader wrote them. [Told you I'd be harsh... Sorry!!] But, all-in-all, I actually enjoyed reading it. Fix these errors, and you'll have publishers practically lining up at your door. [Trust me on this, my step-mother is an author. She taught me a lot about writing] |
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| Alex | Jan 30 2008, 05:43 AM Post #3 |
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thanks actually thats what i want, harsh critics because you can't get anywhere if people just say "oh its really good" and thats it really annoying.well i know about the spacing but i can't really do much about that or the quotations, i see how the place them in books and all but i'm still not 100% sure on how to do it, but thanks for the advice, i'll ask my english teacher to show me how. EDIT: My english teacher also told me about the punctuation mistakes also can you give me an example of similies and metaphors cause honeslty i don't even remember having any in there lol |
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really annoying.
6:40 PM Jul 10